i have long been enamored of you only lately have i found atonement with you at onement i have always been with you for a long while many times before i have found many selves by your side lost at the base of you tangled in your hair resting at your feet beating in the heart of you basking in the heat of you toiling in the sweat and the grime of you I did not come to you late in life, but I have only just come to my coming to you lately and now —just now— we have only moments and still I find my self and you have named me
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Beautiful JCC
Thanks, mums!
The wordplay is just gorgeous here.
Thanks, T–
Brilliant stream of consciousness. Your self-awareness astounds me – you know exactly how you tick and tock 🙂
Thank you Natalie for your kind words. I am afraid (always) that I am never as self-aware as I think I am…..(some kind of strange paradox/conundrum in that, no?).
Learning to hear the ticks, and maybe, hopefully, seeing some of the tocks coming before they arrive (again! yet again!) is often the best that we can hope for.
Beautiful. Atonement at onement. Amazing how we grow and define with one person and you have captured it perfectly.
The “you” of the poem is not actually a person at all, but in some ways much bigger than almost any person could be for me. And it could certainly apply, anyway. I was thinking of Poetry (yes, with a capital P) personified, and how our relationship has changed over the years. She is like the perfect love that I did not deserve, and still, I am not certain…but I get closer every day, with every poem–more to the point, with every poem-making.
Thank you Aud–always good to hear from you–
Even better. I like your explanation. But I also like my reaction to your poem. And that is the beauty of it all. Thanks JCC
Oh, yes–did I not mention that I like that as well?
My bad!
Thank You–
No need for that sir. Smile.
Beautifully done – and not easy to be so elegantly spare and playful while alluding to complex philosophical ideas, I think! I found you through Bussokuseki and can see some common ground there.
Thank you so much. Your words are very kind.
Bussokuseki is greatly respected.
I am flattered that you see common ground shared.
I think that I am not nearly as mindful, not nearly as in the world. I have had a hard time finding a still-point lately. Life and business muddy the pool sometimes.
Thanks–
Gritty and lovely. Perfect.
Thank you so much, Karen–
I appreciate you words.
I had not thought of this one as “gritty,” but come to think of it, I suppose there’s a bit of grit in all my work.
That last line… such impact.
Thank you, Dieu–
As so often happens for me, I thought this poem was almost done for a long time….until that line came to me and I said, “Aha—now, that’s better.”
If a poem’s never finished, but only abandoned, then this one has been set by with great care.
Aha! One of my favorite quotes.
Thank you–“set by with great care”–love that. Makes me think of poems as jars of canned peaches, pickled green beans, apple butter and black raspberry preserves.
Always good to save some for spring.