This man has
turned down a bit
at the corners,
darker and deeper
His mouth is fuller
and shapes the
sounds of our language
in ways that I can not,
in ways learned from another
a tongue with which he prays
to a different god than I,
a tongue accustomed
to a different palate
of tastes, a world of dishes
from a world away
from the ways of my father's world
and he even lays his eyes
upon other men
differently than I do,
this man who stands beside me is
my brother, in every way he cannot
that does not matter—for here
in this place, at this time,
with these meals that we share,
with these arms that we share,
this man is my brother because
a fellow Chef with the same love and artistry as your good self?
Hmm, perhaps I am being too “tricky”?
Not my intention to be misleading.
The narrator is not me.
The narrator is a soldier.
No matter how far we may have come, we still insist on difference, on “us and them” thinking.
Oh 😦 bugga – I know and it’s all in what the reader sees, I possibly had my eyes half closed – blame trying to quit smoking…my mind is screwing with me 😦 and yes we do have that mentality sadly.
To quote a certain Jedi master:
“Do or do not. There is no try.”
😉 You can do it. Good on ya.
thanks mate – Day 3… have done it once before for 7 years, so “trying” once more. It’s not much fun I can tell you 😦
Oh, I know all too well. On again off again for 20+ years. Been free this time for three years this coming Father’s day. I think about having one almost every day.
I know – there are some I know after 20 years they still could. I am doing it differently this time, last time cold turkey, this time I have one at night time, until I get to the point or mindset of none at night time – if I can. Three years excellent 🙂 – so proud of anyone who can beat this. They say cig withdrawal is one of the hardest to go through. I am drinking water like a fish!
“…a tongue with which he prays
to a different god than I…”
Perhaps my favorite line, in a poem full of favorite lines.
Your words always dance. I don’t know how to do that.
I love the way you ended this. I was not expecting that. . . . 🙂
Ah, thank you Jeremy. I am so glad to hear you say that. I have just been reading an interview with a poet, wherein said poet speaks of the establishment of trust between poet and reader. I worry sometimes that I am trying to be too “tricky,” too clever. I do not want to play tricks on my readers and yet I could not see another way to end this poem. I do not want to trick my readers but there still had to be that “trick” at the end. I hope that it still “worked.”
I like your poetry so much becaus it takes interesting turns and is often playful. I never find your work too tricky or emphasizing style over substance. Not at all. 🙂
Thanks so much for that J–I have been lately feeling like I just can’t dive very deeply into the pool and that skimming the surface is just yielding a lot of mytho-poetic-psycho-verbal pond-scum…
I know that feeling, believe me! 🙂