We walked down those roads,
not knowing where we’d been.
We walked down those roads,
round brook and round fen.
We spent all our days
in barley and rye
and we sang to the stars
and had stars in our eyes.
We spent all our days
near loch and near sound.
We all walked alone and
we all walked as one.
We all walked together and
we wandered around.
We heard angels sing
when we had ears for such things
and we sang to ourselves
when we had ears for naught.
We were lost to our selves
for much of the time,
and we all lost our souls
‘midst the rack and the rime.
A piece that may be trying to become something more, but I like it as it is as well.
Even if that third stanza doesn't want to behave...
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You leave that 3rd Stanza alone, poor thing, just walking alone and you have to pick on him 😉
I really liked the flow of this… 2nd and last stanza for me were the stand-outs! 🙂
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Thanks Mums–
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🙂 you are welcome kind sir.
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love how you put that about poor #3 BTW–too funny–the poor deary…
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When I read this, it made me think of my sister ad I, when we were children.
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Thank you for sharing that–I hope they are good memories.
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Hmmm. I like this. I like what it says, and while there is a little meandering in stanza 3, it works with the subject, so I like that too.
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Thanks Susan–like I said, not sure where this is going or maybe it likes where it is just fine…
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i am probably gonna blush hard for saying this – but i will anyways.
whenever i see something new you wrote, it’s like opening a box of chocolates i saved for ‘special occasions’ and taking a piece, tasting it with relish.
i so adore this. dissolves slowly on the tongue.
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Aah Miriam–I’ll see your blush and raise you one rosy-tinted, finger-twiddling batting-of-the-eyes….
I adore your comment…and shall savor it for quite a while…
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🙂
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This has the feel of an old ballad. Lovely.
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Thank you D–it is kind of a cross between heroic couplets and ballad stanzas–won’t bore you with the details of why it’s neither–but thanks for noticing.
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The third doesn’t want to behave as ballad or couplets because its the chorus. 🙂 I think JC that you have a beauty of a song started here. 🙂
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That’s an idea that just occurred to me as well. My wife and I have some musician-friends coming in from OOT and they’ve asked her to perform some originals with them…so I thought this might make a good song–I’ve never been able to put words to music unless it was to parody…
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I definitely think that it would be a good set of lyrics, a start anyway. 🙂 If she does end up singing it, you should record and post…if she doesn’t mind. I would LOVE to hear what gets done with it.
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Yes–If it happens, if I get her to do it, if I can convince that she has it in her, if she will allow me to share it–I will.
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tell her pretty please 🙂
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Roads are one of my favorite subjects- this resonates.
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